So many good ideas to choose from! I like “black roses” because the image has already appeared elsewhere and it might cue people in to look for repeated images early on.
I love the dual motion of this, and the language is FASCINATING! If you haven't completed this, I hope you do, and if you have, PLEASE keep writing poetry.
Love the choice to use Nebuchadnezzar as the frame of the poem.
Tom's suggestion for the poem title makes good sense if you're thinking of using this poem as an intro to the project. "You say amen, not thank you" is sticking with me, too.
But you could say the same for building an understanding of what I mean by “Darkling.”
So many good ideas to choose from! I like “black roses” because the image has already appeared elsewhere and it might cue people in to look for repeated images early on.
I love the dual motion of this, and the language is FASCINATING! If you haven't completed this, I hope you do, and if you have, PLEASE keep writing poetry.
Love the choice to use Nebuchadnezzar as the frame of the poem.
Tom's suggestion for the poem title makes good sense if you're thinking of using this poem as an intro to the project. "You say amen, not thank you" is sticking with me, too.
So quickly
Bright things find the darkling.
Maybe “Beneath the black roses”...?